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Up in the Air (I) (2009)
8/10
Transcends Romantic Comedy
15 December 2009
Jason Reitman and Sheldon Turner accomplish a rare feat in Up in the Air, which is to write a transcendent romantic comedy. In all my genre classes, I talk about the importance of transcending your form, of hitting all the required story beats but also twisting them so the story is original to you. Transcending any genre is hard, but especially so in romantic comedy which is a highly choreographed form with 12 special story beats. The question for the screenwriter becomes: how do you stretch this narrow form and do something that the audience, which loves love, has never seen before.

When you want to transcend a genre, the first thing to focus on is the weakness/need of the hero. Weakness/need is the first of the seven major structure steps, the wellspring of the story and the key to the main character. If you succeed in twisting this beat, you can twist any other beat in the story. That is clearly the case in Up in the Air.

In all love stories, the hero's weakness is that he or she is unable to love. Ryan, the main character in Up in the Air, takes this weakness to the extreme, and in his own mind turns it into a strength. Both personally and professionally, he is the master of disconnection. Not only does he fire people for a living, with style, he is the Casanova of the sky, an artist of love and leave.

But the writers don't stop with this simple organic unity in the main character. In a nice touch, they show us a man who has conjured up a detailed psychological and moral justification for the way he lives. When he's not traveling the country separating people from their work family, Ryan is a motivational speaker who waxes poetic about taking the baggage of your life (ie, your relationships) out of your backpack, so you can move, be free and live.

The love story is the only genre that has two main characters. Once the writers establish a hero who lives at one extreme of the loner/community spectrum, they create his lover, who is the exact female expression of his life philosophy. Notice that the challenge for the writers and actress Vera Farmiga was huge: how do you create a woman George Clooney, world's most desired and eligible bachelor, would believably fall in love with.

Incredibly, the writers and Farmiga pull it off. She is not classically beautiful because that would be a cliché that would guarantee in the mind of the audience that Ryan/Clooney would never fall for her, much less marry her. But she is sexy and smart, and as confident a practitioner of great, free sex as he is.

The audience sees that in spades in her very first scene with Ryan, another love story beat – the "meet cute" – that the writers twist in an especially creative and funny way. Sitting in the hotel bar, the would-be lovers compare credit cards, hotels and techniques required to be a master of the love-and-leave lifestyle. The dialogue is perfect, and the actors knock the scene out of the park.

It is in the script's story structure, determined by the hero's desire line, that we really see why these writers are masters of the screen writing art. Notice that the concept of the film and the unique main character immediately place the writers in a terrible story bind. In the Great Screen writing Class, I talk about the difficulty of writing a story about a purposeless man. Of course, such people exist. But writing a successful story about one of them is nearly impossible, because his weakness – his lack of purpose – also means he has no desire line. Which means the story has no spine.

So how do the writers solve this most essential of all story problems? They have to have some spine, but it has to be true to this character's fundamental weakness. His first desire is to fly 10,000,000 miles, a meaningless accomplishment but one reached by only six people before him. Then he wants the girl.

Notice that neither of these goals can serve as the spine for the entire story. First, he is already flying all the time; it's the same beat. Second, he is the ultimate loner and so is she, so their meetings must be sporadic. Third, he can't find his true desire, if ever, until the end of the story at the self-revelation. So he can actively chase her only in the last 20 minutes of the film.

What to do in the meantime? The writers create a substitute desire line, and ongoing conflict, when Ryan takes the rookie, Natalie, on the road to show her how to fire people. Notice this has nothing to do with the hero's ultimate goal. He never makes a play for her. But she is a variation on the basic theme, having to do with the hero's weakness, in that she is even colder in how she fires people than he is. That forces Ryan to find at least some compassion in doing the work of the devil, and perhaps, just perhaps, cultivates the ground where love can grow in his heart.

The writers complete their twisting of the romantic comedy form by having the story turn in ways that you don't expect (and I won't mention here). Suffice it to say that Reitman and Turner take this love story to its logical extreme, which is deeply satisfying and shocking to the audience at the same time. In this, Up in the Air is similar to the great detective stories, where you look back in total surprise at who done it but realize that's the only way it could have been done. That's great writing.

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7/10
The Lovely Bones
15 December 2009
Warning: Spoilers
Spoiler alert: this structure breakdown contains details about certain events in the story.

I didn't want to see The Lovely Bones. I liked the novel. But the thought of having to watch the rape and murder of a young girl seemed unbearable.

Turns out I was wrong. You don't see the rape and murder. Far more important, the film has some deeply moving moments that brought home for me the true tragedy of the loss of a single human life, and that was the result of choices the screenwriters made. Ironically, those same choices dictated that the film was not as strong as it could have been.

Adapting the book posed several story problems for the screenwriters. The book has multiple story lines, which are easier to interweave in the novel medium where you don't have as serious a dramatic urgency as you do in movies.

In mainstream movies, you have a maximum of two hours to tell your story. That's barely enough time to depict a single main character in a single storyline with both depth and dramatic power. So when you want to tell a multi-line story, something is going to suffer the consequences.

The fundamental technique of the novel, and the determining factor in the adaptation, is the dead girl as omniscient narrator. This creates two big story problems. First, if the character is still talking, she isn't really dead. In most cases, this reduces the sense of tragedy, especially at the end when the writers are going for maximum emotional impact. Second, an omniscient narrator who is also a character is an observer. An observer, by definition, is a reactive character and can't drive the story.

Faced with multiple story lines and a dead omniscient narrator, what solutions did the writers come up with? They began by increasing the role of Suzy, the narrator, in a vain attempt to make her journey the spine, the driving force, of the script. This necessitated spending large amounts of valuable screen time in her fantastical afterlife world. The various landscapes there are quite beautiful. But the fact remains, Suzy is an observer of the more dramatic, present-tense, living drama going on in the world she left.

Whenever you write a scene or a storyline in a script, you must always ask yourself: what is its story value? Answering that question always involves another question: what is the opportunity cost of this scene or storyline? In other words, if I include this in the script what will I be forced to leave out? The scenes in the afterlife have little story value. And they force the writers to cut way back on the effects of Suzy's death on her family. That's a big loss, because this is where the tragedy of the loss of a single life is magnified exponentially.

With the little time they have left, the writers focus on the inherent thriller elements to drive the story home. First the father tries to find the killer, followed by his surviving daughter. The thriller scenes have real power, but even here the line is too truncated to pay off as it should.

In spite of, or perhaps because of, the imbalance in the story lines, the writers use a technique I call the crosscut funnel that gives the film a powerful ending. In an ever-quickening pace, the story crosscuts between the daughter finding the killer, the mother returning home, the killer burying the body, and Suzy experiencing her first kiss with the boy she left behind. This shows us the upside of the multiple story strands, like four waves crashing on the shore all at once.

The most powerful moment of all comes just prior to this crosscutting battle sequence. And here the writers find the true power of the dead narrator technique, along with the one great story value of the beautiful, fantastical world. In a golden meadow surrounding an old leafy tree, Suzy meets all of the girls and women whose lives have been cut short by this one murderer. It is a joyous communion, and it brought tears to my eyes. Tragedy is the profound and painful sense of what might have been. Here in one glorious moment these human beings get to show the audience what it means to be alive, along with the terrible injustice of having their magnificent lives cut short. It's one of the great moments in movies this year, and it reminded me once again why I love writers.

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Auteur (I) (2006)
10/10
Smart, funny comedy
12 December 2006
I borrowed this on DVD from a mutual friend the other day, and just found myself re-watching it over and over. "Auteur" tells the story of Eric Pelham, a professional video pirate (he cam-cords big movies from the back rows of theaters on opening day, then sells the pirated DVDs) who thinks he's hot stuff, and has aspirations of being a real film director. He's even got a script, "through the looking glass" that he wants movie star Jack Burton (nice in-joke reference to Kurt Russell's part in "Big Trouble in Little China") to star in it, and gets him the script.

Even though he's got a gorgeous girlfriend, and a best bud named Lenny, Eric just isn't going to be happy until he makes his own movie...

If I tell you more, it will spoil this very clever movie which, believe it or not, was made by a bunch of grad students from AFI! I'm sure they will all go onto bigger things, as will the actors in this film, especially the guy who played Eric, the lead.

10/10. See it if you have a chance!
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